need help fixing corrections on my psa part 2 paper 1

Here is the corrections that need to be done…..

1. Wordy

2. What advertisement? You should mention the ad before you reference it.

3. Since the purpose of your ad would be to propose a PSA, I would mention that in your thesis. Also, PSAs cannot address legislative matters as they are a government-sponsored organization. What can the average American do to fix this situation?