1- BLUE – need to summarize it to half or less than
2- RED – add source specially addiction. AND check the others.
3- Addiction section make sure to use 2 sources.
4- Add in text citation after every information
5- Add : ACCORDING TO …………… ( INTEXT CITATION)
6- Add more transition words such as MOREOVER, FURTHERMORE, IN ADDITION, AND
7- No passive voice please because I use Grammarly and give me a lot.
8- Use Grammarly program to correct all mistake please.
9- Depression section make it longer a little bit.