on Henry Osawwa Tanner: expand on Tanner’s motivation for avoiding the avant-garde in his work
on David Hammons: give examples/evidence on his religious art
on Lorna Simpson: describe these “magazines” and explain how they exemplify the ideas you already stated
on conclusion paragraph: The female artists also focused on issues of “intersectionality” – you may want to review what this means and incorporate the ideas into your essay. The last couple sentences are too broad, and I would argue that they certainly DID express themselves – you may want to reevaluate this claim
overall: In addition there were quite a few typos and easily fixable errors in the text, be sure to read through your paper carefully and try to eliminate as many of these as possible for your final draft.