wrt102 rewrite the essay about will streaming services like netflix put standard

This is my draft of the paper , and can you modify and rewrite the essay for me?

My professor says that I need to put more statistics.

I also need to add source for the facts.

and the examples to solidify points my work.

You can change my paper by delete the things unnecessary and add your ideas and points.

The picture above can show you my professor’s comment for this essay.