notes from the writing center again

Master of Disaster Medicine & Management.

2010 Haiti earthquake disaster

Could you please take a look for all the notes that he gave me and try to fix them all as much as you can.

Also I think he give only first pages mistakes. Please try to check everything as APA 6th REQUIREMENTS because DR very harsh with grading and I need high score to be in the safe side.

This is the writing center reply :

Good draft !

Most of the feedback on your attached draft discuss tense shifting, clarification, and syntax. I’m not sure if you’re using the literary present or if you’re shifting, since your verb tenses are often inconsistent. Some of the sentences noted below seem incomplete or have confusing/ misplaced modifiers, thus the meaning is obscured. Good luck with the rest of your revision.